Thread:Mirai Moon/@comment-3242362-20170118053044/@comment-3242362-20170120194439

So this would be a sample of how I do scripts. Is there anything you'd want altered about it? (The scene is the first scene of the series.)

4:13:22 PM Lee: "At 4:15, detention gets out. The only problem is, I'm kinda not in detention right now." [A map of the school with a green dot and a red dot moving through it forms on the screen.] "And yeah. That's a pretty huge problem." ''[The camera zooms in on the green dot, revealing that it's Lee, skateboarding down dimly lit hallways. He turns a corner and swerves around obstacles.]'' Lee: [grunting] "Ho! Di! Hwa!" ''[Two cleaners run to the start of the hallway. Spotting Lee, they give chase. Lee grabs a trash can and throws it into their path, but the two cleaners dodge it easily.]'' Lee: "Man, these guys don't give up!" Biffy: [through an earpiece] "You're so dead if you don't make it back before detention's over." Lee: "I'm also dead if these cleaner freaks catch me, so tell me something I don't know!" [Lee turns left into another hallway.] Biffy: "Okay...there's a drink machine coming up." [Lee turns down a stairwell and grinds the handrail.] "Grab me a root beer." Lee: [swerving] "Bwah! Eh! Guh!" ''[He jumps and pushes off of the machine with his skateboard. The machine dispenses a can of Green Apple Splat.]'' "Heh. Ah!" [Two cleaners are headed directly at him.] Lee's Inner Monologue: Why didn't anyone tell me the first day of tenth grade was gonna be the worst day of my life?

''The title card comes up. It reads "Dententionaire."